Monday, March 31, 2008

What passes for TV news writing

This was on the website of the local TV station (I'll not name them in an effort to minimize the embarrassment) this morning. If you want some real fun, try diagramming these sentences:

JONESBORO, AR - A Jonesboro man is dead from stab wounds after an ambulance staff finds the man lying on the ground overnight.

It happened at 3000 Fairview Drive where police were flagged down by ambulance personnel after finding a man whose identity is not being released right now.

The man had suffered mortal stabbing wounds.

Two people inside of the residents at the mentioned address are being questioned but police still say no arrests have been made.

"The victim was transported to the hospital, was pronounced dead by the doctors. There was 2 people present at the house and we have them at the police department for questioning at this time." said Lt. Nathan Oliver of the criminal division of Jonesboro Police Department.

We'll have more on this story throughout the day.

3 comments:

Anonymous said...

These people could write for the Indianapolis Star.

Retired in Alma said...

WTF? Can't they hire someone that knows english?

gemini_dream said...

Oy vey. I think my eyes are bleeding, and my journalistic sensibilities are more mortally wounded than the unnamed victim.

Lauri passed on Maria's congratulations on my new job ... please tell her I said thank-you.

Jamie B.